This assignment contains two parts.
Part 1: Due by 11:59pm on Friday, September 18
- Post the introduction and first body paragraph of Essay 1 (at least 400 words) to the discussion board. Refer to the Assignment 5.6 for the requirements and a sample of what you will be posting.
Part 2: Due by 11:59pm on Sunday, September 20
- Give feedback to two other student’s drafts of Essay 1.
- If a student has not received any feedback yet, pick this student’s draft over a student who has already received feedback.
- We all understand that students aren’t teachers; that’s okay. Part of your strength as a writer comes from learning to review and revise, noting areas of weakness and strength. You are practicing this as you offer constructive criticism to another student. Plus, it helps you to see examples of how other students wrote the assignment.
- Offer at least 50 words of feedback to both students (100 words total).
Use these questions and tips to help you give the two students some feedback. You don’t have to comment on all of these areas; just pick the areas you feel comfortable commenting on and the areas of the student’s draft that need improvement.
- How could the student’s hook be revised to interest the reader more?
- Point out whether the student is missing any of the following from the introduction: title of the Ted Talk, speaker’s name, the speaker’s probable audience, and the speaker’s thesis (main point of the Ted Talk).
- Help the student clarify or develop his or her thesis. The thesis should identify the 3-4 rhetorical strategiesthe student plans to write about in the body and the student’s opinion of how well the writer uses these strategies. The student may also reveal a weakness in the Ted Talk if her or she wants to (but this is not required.)
- Is one rhetorical strategy identified in the topic sentence at the beginning of the body paragraph?
- Is it clear that the examples and quotations the student has included from the Ted Talk actually illustrate the rhetorical strategy stated in the topic sentence? For example, even though you have not watched the Ted Talk, it should still be clear to you, as a reader, that if the topic sentence says the speaker uses logos that the examples or quotations the student has included from the Ted Talk are indeed examples of logos. If it this is not clear, help the student with misunderstandings of the rhetorical strategy or point out what is not clear and where more detail is needed.
- If the student has used direct quotations from the Ted Talk, check to make sure they have done the following:
- The context of the quotation has been explained.
- A signal phrase identifying who says the quotation has been used to smoothly incorporate the quotation.
- Quotation marks are used at the beginning and the ending of the quotation.
- There are no mistakes in the quotation (because it’s important to represent the author/speaker’s words accurately to build your credibility.)
- An in-text citation appears at the end of the quotation showing the time where the quotation appears in the Ted Talk.
- Good example of a smoothly incorporated quotation: One more example of using image as a rhetorical strategy is when the author describes the moment César found his dead brother Cristobal and says, “I slapped his face and when I went to lift him his jaw came loose and blood began to run everywhere. When I knew he was dead I started screaming with rage”(04:30).
- Students will most likely need the most help with the analysis: the intended effect of the rhetorical strategy on the audience. Help the students expand the analysis. Use these questions to help you give them feedback on the analysis:
- Do you think the speaker intended for the rhetorical strategy to appeal to the reader’s level of interest, five senses, emotions, values or logic?
- How might the rhetorical strategy affect the audience’s level of interest, the five senses, emotions, values or logic? And why might the strategy make the audience react this way?
- How might the rhetorical strategy get the audience to agree with the speaker’s thesis?
- How might the reader’s opinions or behavior change as a result of this rhetorical strategy?
- You could also help them with organization, grammar, and in-text citations and point out strengths in the student’s draft.
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